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The plan below shows a student room for two people and a student room for one person at an Australian university.

The diagram illustrates
two
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 types of rooms at an Australian university. A
room
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 is for
two
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 individuals,
whereas
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 the other
room
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 can be lived
by
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in by
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 only one
student
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. The
room
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 for
two
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 people is larger than the single
room
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. It costs $350 per week, so each person pays $175.
This
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 makes it more economical for students than renting a single
room
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. Each
student
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 in
this
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room
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 has a bed, a study desk and a cupboard.
However
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, they have to share a bookshelf, TV, a kitchen, and a bathroom.
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, the
room
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 for one
student
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 is smaller than the
twins
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room
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 at 6 m by 2.5 m. A
student
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 has to pay $200 per week, but the
student
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 can use all
furniture
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the furniture
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 by
itself
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themselves
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.
Furthermore
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, there are no round
table
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tables
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 and chairs
which
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, which
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 are only in a
room
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 for
two
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 people. In summary, there are significant differences between the
two
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 rooms.
While
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 the double
room
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 is spacious and cheaper per person, the single
room
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 is more expensive but comfortable, because you can use the furniture alone.

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weakness
Be sure every fact is clear and true. Some points are not shown well; use clear facts.
improvement
Link ideas with simple words. Use 'and', 'but', 'then' to join lines.
tip
Give a short plan at the start and a short close at the end. State what you will talk about and then sum up.
strength
The write shows both rooms in one plan and uses cost and size to show the compare.
strength
It uses some link words like 'On the other hand' and 'Furthermore'.
strength
It ends with a short summary.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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