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In many countries, people are increasingly choosing flexible working hours instead of traditional fixed schedules. What are the advantages of this trend?

In certain parts of the world, many people have chosen convenient working hours
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 themselves
instead
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 of conventional fixed schedules.
This
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 that phenomenon. Having the freedom to choose your own working
schedule
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 would have a significant advantage in reducing the risk of having poor mental well-being.
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, it will play a vital role
to maintain
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feeling
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a feeling
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less
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of less
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 stress and not feeling exhausted.
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,
this
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 will lead to positive outcomes for the working sector they are in.
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, recent studies have shown that in India they have been witnessing remarkable benefits in their companies, since they let
its
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their
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 employees
to
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apply
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organize
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organise
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 their
attending
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attendance
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schedule
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by
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on
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 their own
welling
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will
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. Despite that advantage, having the right to adjust your attendance
schedule
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 can play a contributing role in
effecting
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 people's attitude in the long term.
Due to
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 choosing
convenient
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 time for our work, over time, we would be vulnerable to merely working under our own discussion.
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, that would result in negative
consequence
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consequences
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to
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 our
behavior
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behaviour
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.
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, in the UK, statistics have found that when they allow the freedom of adjusting their own working
schedule
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, they have
notice
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noticed
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 a significant fluctuation in their attitudes in a negative way.
To sum up
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, having the right to choose your working hours would lead to having good mental health and would play a vital role in reducing stress and tiredness, but
also
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, it can have a profound impact on your personality in the
long-term
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period
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content
Stay on the task. If the prompt asks for advantages only, write only the good side and one or two ideas with proof.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a clear sentence that tells the point, then give one example.
grammar
Fix small mistakes in words. Use simple, correct form like well-being and own, not 'well ing' or funny spelling.
language
Make the flow smooth. Use linking words to move from one idea to the next.
structure
The topic is clear and the goal is stated at the start.
content
There are real place examples being used.
structure
There is a short ending that tries to sum up.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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