The two maps shows layout of a school on 1985 and the present.

The maps compare the layout of the school in the past with its current appearance.
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, the school was substantially redeveloped, with major changes including the addition of new facilities and the reorganisation of the existing areas. The playing fields were reduced in size to make way for a new leisure centre, which includes a swimming pool and a fitness centre in the south-west site.
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, two new classrooms were built on the remaining part of the former playing area. These developments were necessary
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the significant rise in student enrolment, which increased from approximately 1,500 students in 1985 to around 2,300 students at present.
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, the main hall in the
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was removed,
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the office remained unchanged.
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, the small car park was demolished. The library experienced a significant modification, as it was reduced in size and divided into two
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a learning resources centre and a computer room.

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