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🔶More and more people are eating healthy food and exercising regularly. 🔸What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

The society has changed greatly in recent years, and
this
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 includes the mentality of
people
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 towards
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle.Many
peopole
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people
 are consuming healthy
food
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 and moving regularly.
This
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 essay will
duscuss
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discuss
 the
poosible
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possible
 reasons
behaind
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behind
this
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 change in behaviour and will suggest how to encourage more
peolple
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people
 to follow the same steps. One of the main
reason
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reasons
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 behind the idea of eating healthy
food
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 and doing exercise
in
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on
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 a regular basis is the influence of social media. Many
inflluencers
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influencers
 are sharing their healthy way of eating and exercising on their accounts. Those materials
wich
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which
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domenistrate
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demonstrate
a
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apply
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good looking
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good-looking
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 bodybuilders and models, have
encaged
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encouraged
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 many
people
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 to follow a balanced diet and exercise to obtain their
gools
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goals
 of having a sexy body.Another reason behind
this
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 phenomenon is the availability of many options
of
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for
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 healthy
food
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 and sports facilities. In the past, there was a lack of
resturants
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restaurants
 offering healthy
cousines
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cuisine
,
insted
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instead
 fast
food
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 restaurants offering
junck
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junk
food
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 were
widley
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widely
 spread in
differnt
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different
 areas.
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, exercising was
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also
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apply
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difficult
due to
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 the
exagerated
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exaggerated
 prices of
sport
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sports
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 facilities and clubs.
However
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, an effort should be
done
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made
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 to attract more
people
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 to follow a healthy
lifestlye
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lifestyle
.
This
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 can be achieved by increasing the awareness of
peopole
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people
 about the diet and
movemnet
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movement
 regularly. Health
promtions
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promotions
 about cardiac diseases can definitely get fantastic results. When
people
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 are knowledged about the importance of the value of balanced nutrition and
exercises
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exercise
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on
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in
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 avoiding heart attacks, they will be really motivated to eat healthy
food
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 and go to the gym. In conclusion,
the
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apply
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social media and the
wide
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widespread
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spread
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availability
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 of healthy
food
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 and
sport
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sports
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facilites
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facilities
 have greatly
enhaced
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encouraged
people
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 to follow a healthy lifestyle in the past years
but
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, but
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 there
are
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is
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 a lot
can
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that can
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 be done in the future to make
healthy
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a healthy
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 diet and movement the first choice of living among the whole population.

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structure
Use one clear idea in each paragraph and a short sentence for it.
language
Check spell and grammar; use easy words only.
conclusion
End with a short conclusion that restates main idea.
content
The essay answers both questions.
coherence
Good link between reasons and result.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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