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The line graph differs the amount of nitrogen oxide by four types of vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The line graph gives us
comparisions
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comparisons
,
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apply
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 about produce
nitrogen
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oxide
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emission
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emissions
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 from four different vehicles.
Such
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 as
,
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apply
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busses
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buses
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, lorries.
pertrol
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petrol
car
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. and
diesel
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a diesel
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car
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. As the chart
shown
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,
petrols
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petrol
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car
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cars
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 have
produce
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produced
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nitrogen
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oxide
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emission
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emissions
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start
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starting
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 at 10
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gram
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grams
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 per
kilometre
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, and have stable or
constan
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constant
.
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emissions.
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 Their
emission
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does
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do
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 not have
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 increase or decrease in
emission
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. Same with petrol
car
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, diesel
car
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have
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has
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 stable or
stagnan
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stagnant
emission
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.
However
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, different than petrol cars,
their
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they
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produced
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produce
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nitrogen
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oxide
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emission
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on
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of
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 5
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gram
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grams
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 per
kilometre
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.
On the other hand
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, buses have a
fluctuate
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fluctuating
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 line graph. They start
produced
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producing
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on
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at
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 40
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gram
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grams
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 per
kilometre
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, and will
decreased
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decrease
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while
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 they
going
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are going
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 until 25
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gram
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grams
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 per hour when they
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are goin
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goin
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going
in
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at
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 60
kilomtre
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kilometres
 per hour.
However
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, when their speed
more
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is more
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 than 70
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kilometre
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kilometres
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 per hour
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, their
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their
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they
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produced
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produce
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 more
nitrogen
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oxide
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emission
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 than before. and can
produced
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produce
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morethan
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more than
 40
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gram
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grams
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. Different from buses,
lories
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lorries
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produced
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produce
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emission
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emissions
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on
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of
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 35
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gram
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grams
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Linking Words
while
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when
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their
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they
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 start. And they will
decreased
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decrease
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 their production when they have more speed.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nitrogen, oxide, emission, car, gram, kilometre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emissions
  • nitrogen oxide
  • vehicle types
  • observed period
  • significant increase/decrease
  • emission levels
  • intersections
  • overtakes
  • largest/smallest emitter
  • conclude
  • overall trend
  • emission rankings
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