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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare the
sources
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 of
electricity
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 generation in
Germany
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 and
France
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 in 2009, showing both total production and the breakdown of renewable
energy
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.
Overall
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,
Germany
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 produced slightly more
electricity
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 than
France
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, and
while
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 conventional thermal
power
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 dominated in
Germany
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,
France
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 relied heavily on nuclear
energy
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. In terms of
renewables
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,
Germany
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 used a more balanced mix of
sources
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,
whereas
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France
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 depended mainly on hydroelectric
power
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. In
Germany
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, total
electricity
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 generation amounted to 560 billion kWh. The largest share came from conventional thermal
sources
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, accounting for 59.6%, followed by nuclear
power
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 at 23%.
Renewables
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 made up 17.4% of the total. Within renewable
energy
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, biomass was the most significant source at 39.3%, closely followed by wind at 36.9%. Hydroelectric
power
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 contributed 17.7%,
while
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 solar
energy
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 accounted for only 6.1%. Geothermal
energy
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 was not used.
France
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 generated a total of 510 billion kWh of
electricity
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. Nuclear
power
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 dominated production at 76%,
whereas
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renewables
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 represented 13.7%, and conventional thermal
sources
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 accounted for a much smaller proportion. Among
renewables
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, hydroelectric
power
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 was by far the main source at 80.5%,
while
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 wind and biomass contributed 10.5% and 8.1% respectively. Solar and geothermal
energy
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 played a negligible role.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, electricity, germany, france, energy, power, renewables with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
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