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You recently had a holiday visiting your friends and you stayed at their house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Thank your friend for staying with them Tell them what you enjoyed the most about the holiday Explain you are sending photos of the holiday with the letter

Hello Liza Hope
you
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you're
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 doing well! I am writing
this
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 letter to thank you from the bottom of my heart
to invite
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for inviting
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 me
at
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to
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 your place in London and letting me experience an amazing holiday of my life
which
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, which
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 I will always cherish. Most importantly
during
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, during
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 the time when I was in
an
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apply
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urgent need of a good break from my busy work schedule. I enjoyed
a
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myself a
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lot in
this
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 city
along with
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 your friends. I mostly enjoyed the night outs which we made
while
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 experiencing
christmas
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Christmas
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 markets all over the city, all the decor, food, and
specialy
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especially
 hot chocolates of London are really amazing.
Moreover
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, I
also
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 enjoyed our
late night
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late-night
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gossips
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gossip
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 and watching Christmas movies together. I would say you really have a good taste in selecting movies. I thought I should print out some pictures of all of us as a memory. I myself have pinned all the photos on a
pin board
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pinboard
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 in my room
which
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, which
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 always gives a smile on my face. I am sending you some photos too. Hope we will be able to spend more time together soon. Yours Daisy

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task
Task response: answer all parts clearly in order, and add a short opening line to set a warm tone.
coherence
Coherence: break long text into 2–3 shorter paragraphs and use simple linking words.
coherence
Greeting and closing: greet well at the start and end with a clear sign-off.
coherence
Single idea per paragraph: keep one main idea in each paragraph and avoid long blocks.
tone
Warm and friendly tone throughout the letter.
content
You thank your friend and share what you enjoyed well.
structure
You mention sending photos, which shows care.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • grateful
  • hospitality
  • memorable
  • activities
  • cherished
  • bonding
  • delightful
  • explore
  • experience
  • photographs
  • reminiscing
  • treasured moments
  • return the favor
  • inviting
  • appreciate
  • kindness
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