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Why don’t people take environmental issues seriously in spite of being given many warning by scientists? Why don’t people save energy in their daily life? Discuss the possible causes of these phenomena and give possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Environmental issues
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 sparked considerable discussion in recent years.
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 some believe maintaining environmental hygiene is much more necessary
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apply
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whereas
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,
other
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others
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thought
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its
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it's
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 just a waste of time. In my opinion,
i
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I
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 largely agree because it
is help
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 us in consuming natural and fresh air and maintaining our
health
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also
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, and
this
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easy
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explain
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 why. The primary reason for my agreement is
environment
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 is very important for
bring
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bringing
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health
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 and wealth.
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, a good
environment
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help
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helps
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people
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 in maintaining
a
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apply
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good
health
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, fresh air and good
physic
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physical
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.
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health.
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 In 2005, THE HINDUSTAN TIMES
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apply
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 survey
was
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conducted and show more green
area
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areas
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 covered by trees
make
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increases
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 individual
health
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 rate 90%
lived
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living
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than
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in
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 the
area
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areas
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uncovered
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by green
area
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, which
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also decreased
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decreased
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decreases
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down
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the wealth rate
aslso
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apply
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.
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, it will
also
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 help in
production
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the production
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 of
energy
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 and
much
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many
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 more
thing
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things
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. Another compelling argument is
multiple
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that multiple
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research
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studies
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was
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 conducted on the safety and security of the
environment
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. Recently,
one
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 popular
articles
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 was printed
suggested
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suggesting
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 "MORE THE GREENIER, MORE THE LIVING",
it
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which
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 clearly indicates the necessity of protecting the
environment
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.
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,
people
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 started taking everything lightly, shown by not consuming the
energy
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 effectively and started misusing
this
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. One research was conducted
on
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in
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 2005, where it
can
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was
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 shown that
people
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 after having knowledge
have
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are
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 irresponsible about
this
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.
Government
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The government
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 should put more taxes on electricity so that
people
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 can understand the value of
energy
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 and consume as much as they
can
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apply
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need. In conclusion ,
i
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I
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 firmly agree that
environment
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as well as
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energy
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is
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are
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 much needed for daily living
for
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apply
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the
survive
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survive,
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while
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 alternate views exist by making
people
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 more aware about it and
teach
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teaching
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 them the value of these things.

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structure
Use simple sentences and a clear plan. Start with what you will say, then say it. Use words like first, next, and finally to show the plan.
language
Fix grammar and spelling. Keep to short form and common words. Read it aloud to hear where it breaks.
content
Build your ideas. Give 2 or 3 clear causes or examples and explain how each links to your view. Finish with a clear solution.
content
The essay has a clear view on the topic.
content
It tries to use examples to explain points.
content
The topic is connected to both environment and energy, which fits the task.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive dissonance
  • economic factors
  • environmental sustainability
  • eco-friendly
  • awareness campaigns
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable practices
  • misinformation
  • collective action
  • energy efficiency
  • climate change
  • scientific findings
  • community-based initiatives
  • peer influence
  • long-term savings
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