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Band 2

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagrams illustrate the changes undergone in Beechwood
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farm
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Farm
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 since 1950.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 a significant development
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occurred during the time span. Noticeably, the area where sheep were kept by several infrastructure, including solar panels and a camping field.
To begin
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 with, in 1950, the
farm
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 was undeveloped compared to the present date. A farmshop was built in the modern stage,
while
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 farming areas, including fruit trees, soft fruits, and
vegetables
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 sites were remained the same.
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, there was an untrodden track to travel across the
farm
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, which is now renovated into a road.
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, two parking sites were built to improve
the
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transportation. Meanwhile, the barn, which was placed
in
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on
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 the eastern side of the site,
is
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 now
moved
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been moved
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 to the western area of the
farm
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, which is
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connected to the southern end of the road. At present, a camping site and a new solar system were installed, replacing the region where
sheeps
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sheep
 were kept. Despite the farmhouse and chicken area
were remained
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 untouched, holiday cottages
are
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have
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 recently
built
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been built
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, replacing the initial barn.

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grammar
Fix the grammar and spelling. Use the right form. For example, say 'sheep' not 'sheeps'.
structure
Make a simple plan before writing. Start with a short intro, then talk about 1950 then today, then a short end.
coherence
Use clear linking words to show compare, such as 'in 1950', 'today', 'also', 'but'.
accuracy
Check facts in the text. Some points may be not clear or wrong. Keep to what the figure shows.
content
Keep to main points. Describe changes in build, land use, and how the farm is used now.
content
The idea of compare old and new is clear.
content
The essay notes many changes in land and build.
structure
There is an opening that shows the task.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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