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The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.

The given diagrams illustrate the changes that have taken place in Wellington
town
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 in 1780, 1860 and 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 a noticeable development has been undergone in
this
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town
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 during the time span. Particularly, the green spaces have been reduced
while
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 the
town
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 has become more urbanised.
To begin
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 with, in 1780, there were 100 houses situated in the northeastern corner of
this
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town
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while
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, while
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 more trees were grown in the southeastern site, enhancing the sustainability of the
city
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. In the middle of the
city
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, there were four farms
while
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 a
river
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 flows from the north-east region towards
south-west
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the south-west
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 direction of the
city
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.
However
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, in 1860, a bridge was built across the
river
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and
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, and
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also
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apply
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a road towards the
river
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made
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apply
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, improving its accessibility. Despite
,
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apply
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 the trees and farming area
were
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being
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 reduced, an additional 100 houses were placed to support the living necessities of people. In 2000, a significant development can be seen compared to
initial
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the initial
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 years. At the
ending
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end
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 of the
river
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, a wetland for birds was built and
also
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, markets were
place
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placed
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 along the right end of the
river
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. The transportation service was developed, despite no features
had
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having
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 been made to bridge since 1860.
Additionally
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,
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city
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the city
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 was more developed with new amenities and expanded housing areas
which
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, which
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 included 500 homes.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, city, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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