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Band 5.5

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This
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 chart illustrates the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who
had
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apply
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stayed at a Caribbean
island
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 from 2010
till
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to
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 2017.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of tourists increased
through
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throughout
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 the whole period. At the beginning, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who preferred to stay on
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island
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the island
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 was less than
who
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those who
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 preferred to
accommodate
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be accommodated
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 on
cruise
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a cruise
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 ship,
while
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 it
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was vise
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vise
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at the end
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. The total
number
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 of
visitors
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 started at 1
million
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at
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in
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 2010.
Then
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, it
raised
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rose
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 gradually to more than 2.6
million
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at
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in
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 2015. Between 2015 and 2016, it remained constant.
Then
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, it surged from more than 2.6 to 3.5
million
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 in 2017. The
number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 who
accommodated
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were accommodated
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 on
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island
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the island
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 started at more than 0.6
millions
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million
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at
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in
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 2010. In the following, it stayed constant till 2011.
Then
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, it experienced an increase from more than 0.6
million
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 to 1.5
million
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 between 2011 and 2013. In the next three years, it
remain
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will remain
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 stable.
Subsequently
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, it showed a decrease from 1.5
million
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at
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in
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 2015 to less
1.3
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than 1.3
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million
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at
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in
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 2016.
Finally
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, it showed a growth and reached
to
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apply
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its
pervious
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previous
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number
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. The
number
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 of tourists who stayed on cruise ships stood at a quarter
million
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on
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in
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 2010.
Next,
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it showed an increase to half of
million
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on
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in
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 2011.
Then
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, it decreased and hit
the
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a
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bottom
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low
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 of more than 0.2
million
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on
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in
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 2012. In the following, it experienced a dramatic increase between 2012 and 2017 from more than a fifth
million
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 to 2
million
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. It can be seen that the
number
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 of tourists who preferred to stay on
cruise
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a cruise
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 ship outnumbered the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who stayed on
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island
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the island
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at
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in
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 the middle of 2015.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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