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The graphs show the tourist number to Australia and types of travels among three nations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given charts depict the total
of
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number of
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tourists
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 travelling to Australia and their
varieties of
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various
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travels
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travel
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,
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types,
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 particularly
among
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in
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 the United Kingdom, the United States and Japan between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
tourists
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were
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was
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 elevated during the time frame among the given countries, except for
Japanese
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Japan
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.
While
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 the backpacking
tourists
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 increased steadily, the
tourists
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 who used travel
agency were
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agencies
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 fluctuated over the period. In terms of
total
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the total
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number
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 of
tourists
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, the highest figure was recorded by
japanese
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Japanese
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tourists
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 in 1995, which accounted for 1,400,000
and
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, and
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 it was twice as high as that in 2000. In 2000,
UK
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the UK
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 and
USA
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the USA
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 recorded
equal
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an equal
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number
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, each recorded nearly 1,350,000.
Additionally
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, the lowest figure was recorded in 1995 by the United States
tourists
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. Regarding the types of holidays, there was a significant upward trend in the total
of
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number of
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tourists
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,
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apply
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 who used travel agencies between 1995 and 2005.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of backpackers varied during the time, reporting a peak in 2000, which accounted for nearly 15
billions
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billion
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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