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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the mostprominent language in the world, Some people think this will lead toEnglish becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

Nowadays
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 an increasing number of people pay attention to the languages around the world
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 the development of
tourism
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. Some
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people
 think that it will cause
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English
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become
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to become
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 the only language, which is used by the whole
poeple
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people
. In my mind, it will not be achieved because of the disadvantages. From some perspective, if there is only
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one languages
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languages
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language
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(
English
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) to speak around the world, the diversity of the culture will decline a
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 because there are a
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 of special words to
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represent
 the unique
meaningsthat
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meanings that
 the other languages can not
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represent
.
This
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 will lead the tourists to
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a decrease
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 because
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more and more similar
culture
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cultures
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 will not attract the eyes of
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visitors, which will cause
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a trecession
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trecession
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recession
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in the
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 development of
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For example
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, several Chinese words can not be translated
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English
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Therefore
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, if
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English
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 replaces
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apply
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Chinese in the future, a
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 of
insteresting
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interesting
 words and some
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slang
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 in some regions will fade away.
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English
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 can help the communication with
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other
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overseas
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 visitors and earn money in
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 short period, it is not a durable method either. Maybe some visitors will visit the countries because of the
convinence
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convenience
 of
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communication.
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, the current will fade quickly because a
lot
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 of culture
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 and they can not find the novel spots.
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,
although
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 it can bring
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 large amount of money from
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tourism
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becaue
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because
 of the uniformity of the language, we ought to focus on the
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sustainable
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 development of
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tourism
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 in the future.

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task
Explain both sides clearly and even use a simple plan.
coherence
Plan your essay: intro, 2 or 3 ideas, then a short end.
grammar
Give one clear example for each point and fix easy errors.
vocabulary
Use short, easy words and spell common words right.
content
The idea that one language could harm culture is seen.
language
It uses easy words.
structure
There is an intro and a closing line.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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