Unmanned vehicles will become more and more popular in the future. Passengers travelling inside these robot cars will be only human. Do you think the benefits of these surpass the drawbacks?

Self-driving
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are becoming popular these days. And using these
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as a mode of transportation has more pros than cons. Because of safety and convenience , getting through these new futuristic
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First of all, the robotic
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can provide more safer drive. These
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are equipped with features that reduce the chances of accidents.
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, most accidents happen
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human error , and if
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are involved
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there will be zero probability of any misfortune.
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, in a new Tesla auto-driven car, there is a feature which stops the car on the side of the road in any emergency , like brake failure and calls 911 instantly.
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, people can travel more comfortably with self-driving
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and utilise their travel time to attend online meetings and finish any pending work. The only drawback of
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advancement is that many people will lose their jobs,
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increasing the unemployment rate.
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, many people work in taxi companies or do ride share like Uber. After the commercialisation of autonomous
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, there will be no need for
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drivers, making them unemployed. In conclusion, there are a few drawbacks to having self-driving
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, but the benefits usually outweigh the disadvantages because of the safety and ease of travel provided by these
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