Economic growth is the only way to end world poverty. However, some people say it lead to environment damage and should be stopped. To what extent do you agree ?

The economy is
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considerable
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factor
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the status of a country. Despite
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, some people argue that economic growth would pave the way to environmental
pollution
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. In my view, I partially agree with
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argument and would provide reasons in
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essay. On one hand, the financial growth is essential to support the daily necessities of the
populations
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population
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.
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, so many people are suffering from poverty. To solve
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,
urbanization
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has paved the way to open new commercial industries and has created many job
oppourtunities
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opportunities
.
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mitigates the unemployment rate of the country, increasing one's income.
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, if one's economic status increases, it indirectly
make
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a person
to
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reach nutritious food, education
oppourtunities
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opportunities
and access
good
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to good
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health services and etc.
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, these factories utilise innovative machinery which
generate
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generates
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harmful emissions.
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, various chemicals are used in their
dialy procesings
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dialysis processes
, and are disposed
to
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nearby waterways. These would create air
pollution
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and water
pollution
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, which directly affect not only
humans
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human
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health, but
also
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for animals and plants. In conclusion, despite having demerits
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as air
pollution
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and water
pollution
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, there are diverse benefits of achieving
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apply
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economic growth. I believe that, if environmental risk assessments are conducted in factories and promote
green friendly
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green-friendly
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processings
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processes
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, it would be a good investment to eliminate the
overall
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poverty of the nation.

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task response
Make your view clear at the start and stay with it all through the essay.
content
Give more facts or real examples to show how growth can help and hurt.
language
Fix small miss spell and bad word use; use simple, easy words so the reader can follow.
content
You state your view and keep it.
structure
You use clear link words like 'On one hand' and 'On the other hand'.
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You end with a short, clear conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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