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Band 3

Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future society while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both of view and give your opinion.

Nowadays, urbanisation has
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led to
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 a rise
of
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usage
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the usage
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 of new
technology
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,
such
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 as
invention
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the invention
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 of
robots
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. A debate sparked on whether these
robots
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plays
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play
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 an important
role
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role,
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while
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 some
believes
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believe
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 it might
occur
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cause
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 demerits to society. In my view, I partially agree with the former view and would provide reasons in
this
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 essay. Undoubtedly, the development of new
technology
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,
such
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 as the invention of
robots
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, is important for achieving daily tasks.
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, it makes our lives more comfortable and time-saving.
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, in some
countries
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countries,
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 robotic
technology
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has
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is
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 used to prepare food
in
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on
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large
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a large
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 scale, making the work
more
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apply
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easier.
Secondly
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, these
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technology
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technologies
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 can be used for the
benefits
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benefit
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 of
health
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the health
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 sector,
particulary
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particularly
 as health monitoring devices.
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, during
covid
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the COVID-19
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 pandemic, Sri Lanka used a simple robotic device to provide medications to
quarrantined
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quarantined
 patients.
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, nowadays,
this
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technology
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including
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, including
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 artificial intelligence (AI
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),
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has limited the manual work in diverse companies.
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 directly affects the employment status of a country. Alternatively, in order to have a healthy society, good relationships
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 each other
is
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are
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 a key. If
robots
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 and AI
technology
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 are used in factories, the human interactions would be limited. In conclusion, despite having some negligible demerits, the robotic
technology
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 is very beneficial to modern living. If used wisely and precisely, our lives would become
more
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apply
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easier,
while
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 uplifting the quality of
live
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life
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.

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task
Make your view clear in the intro and keep it in the end. Add more detail to each idea to show you think deeply about the topic.
structure
Use one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a short sentence that tells the reader what the paragraph is about, then add more facts or examples.
examples
Give more real or simple examples. Check spell and small grammar, like quarantined, and not say 'more easier'.
coherence
Use easy links to move from one idea to the next, for example 'also', 'but', 'however', 'therefore'. Keep sentences short.
strength
You tell both sides and your own view.
strength
You use small but real examples from life.
strength
The essay is easy to read and follow.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • robots
  • society
  • important
  • role
  • negative
  • effects
  • tasks
  • easier
  • clean
  • homes
  • cook
  • meals
  • care
  • elderly
  • quality
  • life
  • jobs
  • fields
  • design
  • software
  • development
  • maintenance
  • technology
  • advances
  • unemployment
  • economic
  • problems
  • privacy
  • security
  • common
  • data
  • risks
  • information
  • well-being
  • medical
  • fields
  • surgeries
  • patient
  • care
  • lives
  • health
  • outcomes
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