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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph
compare
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compares
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 the outcomes of
survey
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a survey
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 about
properation
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the appropriation
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 of people's
coffee
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anel
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and
 tea purchasing and drinking habits in 5 regions in
Australlion
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Australia
 during
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last
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the last
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 four weeks.
Overall
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, I can
seen
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see
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 that the percentage of city residents who bought Fresh
Coffee
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 or tea was an upward trend in all
cities
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,
,
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apply
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while
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a
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apply
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the
rate
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rate
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of rate
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 who
preffered
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preferred
 to buy fresh
coffee
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has
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remained
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 the same in two
cities
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which
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, which
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 are Brisbane and Adelaide. Figure for people who went to
cafe
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a cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or tea in three locations in Australia, which are Sydney, Melbourne,
anel
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and
 Hobart, where the
rate
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just
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is just
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 under 65% . Meanwhile, the
proporation
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proportion
 witnessed a decrease in
other
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the other
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 two
cities
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which
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, which
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 are Brisbane and Adelaide (56%, 49% respectively).
On the other hand
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, regarding to
the
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apply
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both regions which are Brisbane and
Adelaide
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Adelaide,
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 have approximately the same
rate
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, standing at 34%
.
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,
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in buying fresh
coffee
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.
Moreover
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, buying instant
coffee
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 illustrated
fluctuate
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precentage
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percentage
 in all five
cities
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