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Band 3

computer are increasingly used in education in which areas do you think are computers more important in which areas are teachers more important.

Computers
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 are very useful to find information quickly, to take online courses, and to use simple tools for science and math, so students learn faster and can see how ideas work. In class,
computers
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 help with practice in languages and math, give quick feedback, and allow students to work together on shared documents, which keeps learning active.
Computers
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 can save time for teachers by showing patterns in student work and tracking progress, but teachers are still needed to explain ideas, guide tasks, and support students in person. A good education uses both, with
computers
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 handling routine tasks and large data,
while
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 teachers provide motivation, clear explanations, and human support to learning.

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coherence
Coherence and cohesion: add a simple intro and a short ending, use linking words to show how ideas go together.
content
The essay shows a clear idea that both tech and teachers are used.
structure
Good use of paragraphing and simple links between ideas.
language
Ideas are easy to read with simple words.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information
  • search
  • online
  • course
  • science
  • math
  • practice
  • feedback
  • language
  • writing
  • grammar
  • group work
  • documents
  • data
  • pace
  • remote learning
  • learning
  • teacher
  • student
  • class
  • guidance
  • motivation
  • planning
  • assessment
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