The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

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the development of the town in Norbiton from now to
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future
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the future
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,
The
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map illustrates more facilities for the
future
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,
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the housing
area
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will be increased in development. People can see in situated on
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the North
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side
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there will be built a bridge and people can cross the river easily.
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, the Farmland will be replaced by
the
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housing. Moving on
the
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area
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which is surrounded by factories will be replaced with housing in the
future
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. At the same time, the housing
area
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in
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planned will house
school
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a school
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, play
ground
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in the
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map. At the
center
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of the map, there is a roundabout situated at the
center
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of the road. In
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future
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there will be built the shops and medical center near
by
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the biggest roundabout. What
even
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more in the planned
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development there will be constructed a new traffic circle under the main roundabout.
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, a new road will be built to
expend
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the residential
area
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which is located in the Northwest of the main roundabout.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words future, area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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