The chart below shows the number of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart gives information about the group of individuals ( adults, people aged under 15 and special exhibition visitors) who visited a museum from 1997 to 2012.
Overall
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, it is obvious that adults were highly tend to visit the museum,
while
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others were not as interested as they were. Unlike the group of attendees under 15 years old that had a downward trend, the other two groups had an upward pattern. Regarding the guests with the highest
number
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of visits, during the first five
years
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their
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stayed almost the same, at around 300.000 attendings.
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, in the first half of the next decade, the figure of adults peaked at 400.000 , and in the second interval it saw a reduction to 20.000. When it comes to the visitors with low attendance, the gap between them was getting smaller over the given period.
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the 120.000 guests under 15 in 1997 constantly decreased until the end, the reverse was true for special exhibition visitors, whose
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accounted for 28.000 in that year. In 2012, the
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of these two groups of attendees was 82.300 and 42.000 , respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • number
  • visitor
  • museum
  • overall
  • peak
  • increase
  • low
  • adults
  • school groups
  • senior citizens
  • period
  • main audience
  • comparisons
  • features
  • suggesting
  • growth
  • programs
  • years
  • initial
  • showing
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