The bar chart below shows the Percentage of Australian man and woman in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart compares the proportions of Australian
men
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and
women
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across six
age
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groups who engaged in regular physical activity in 2010.
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,
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were more likely than
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to exercise regularly in all
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groups except the youngest.
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female participation remained relatively stable across adulthood, the rate for
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fluctuated considerably, with a noticeable decline in middle
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. In the 15–24
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group,
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were more active than
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, with about 52% of males exercising regularly compared to approximately 48% of females.
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pattern reversed in the 25–34 group, where female participation rose to just over 48%,
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the figure for
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dropped sharply to around 42%. Among those aged 35–44 and 45–54,
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continued to record higher activity levels, at roughly 52% and 54% respectively,
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male participation reached its lowest point at about 39% in the 35–44 group before recovering slightly to around 43% among 45–54-year-olds. In the older
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groups, 55–64 and 65 and over, the gap narrowed, though
women
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still remained more active, with approximately 53% and 47% exercising regularly, compared with about 45% and 46% of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Gender difference
  • Proportion
  • Participation rate
  • Exercise
  • Physical fitness
  • Observation
  • Likely causes
  • Activity levels
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