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The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints from passengers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graphs depict the punctuality of bus performance and the total number of
complaints
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 from passengers between 1999 and 2003.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the scheduled
time
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 of bus arrival was higher than its actual
time
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 throughout the given period, with the exception of the final
year
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. Meanwhile, there was a gradual upward trend in the number of
complaints
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 over the period, except in 2001. In 1999 and 2000,
expected
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 arrival
time
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 of buses recorded a similar figure, each accounted for 86%.
Furthermore
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, the highest difference between the actual and target bus
time
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 was exhibited in 2000, accounting for about 4%. It is evident that the expected
time
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 remained generally stable during the remainder of the period at about 85%. In terms of
complaints
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, the lowest figure was reported in the initial
year
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, which accounted for about 70
complaints
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 per thousand passenger trips. In the next
year
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,
complaints
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were
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significantly rose, before experiencing a dip in 2001 at about 80 per thousand journeys.
In addition
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, the highest share of
complaints
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were
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was
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 recorded in the final
year
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, which was 10 per thousand passenger trips higher than that in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints, time, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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