The bar chart below shows the Percentage of Australian man and woman in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart above describes the percentage of
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males and females of all ages who did regular physical
exercises
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in 2010, except for those under fifteen years old. We can see that more than half of the
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women
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from 35 to 64 did regular physical activity, but only the
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men whose
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are between fifteen and twenty-four were over half.
According to
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the chart, in 2010, there
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increasing
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tendency
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Australian
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women
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with age until they were older than 64. So, we can know that
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women
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did
exercises
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frequently when they were young or in their middle ages. The
women
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population who were 65 and above
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have almost 47
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doing regular
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exercises
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exercise
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.
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, when it comes to
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Australian
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men, the percentage of doing physical activity always decreases until the age of 44. Even though men who were 45 and above increasingly did
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, the population is consistently less
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respective population of
women
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in the same ages.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, exercises, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Gender difference
  • Proportion
  • Participation rate
  • Exercise
  • Physical fitness
  • Observation
  • Likely causes
  • Activity levels
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