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Band 2.5

Nowadays, many people work too much and feel stressed at work. Why does this happen? How can we solve this problem?

Working too much can absolutely
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 stress and exhaustion, especially
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apply
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 after having a rough day of work.
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 can
be
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occured
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occur
in
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at
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 any
ages
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even
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, even
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 if you are not in
stage
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a stage
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 of life where you are employed.
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, having a talk on
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 topic is indeed crucial for anyone finding it difficult to handle
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stress.
Nowaday
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this
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 problem
is
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commonly
happen
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on
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 everyone around the world. Exeed working uses tons of
energies
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energy
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meaning
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, meaning
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 when all these energies are being
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 there might be
littlr
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little
 left, so we come home exhausted, and can even
stressed
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stress
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 the life out of us. Stressing over a job is very common in
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 generation for us having to
wrork
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work
 too much than we are supposed to.
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, there are always solutions to
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problems
as
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 someone who occasionally feels stressed
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, Doing
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Doing
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doing
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 something that makes you feel relaxed or
keeping
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keeps
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 you from overthinking might be the most useful method I have ever done
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however
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, results are different in everyone
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 might find
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 a waste of time. In conclusion, from my point of
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 I think we all should know how to cope with
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 since we have to live with
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 for probably the rest of our
life
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lives
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 unless we are unemployed or retired.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear plan: a short intro, 2 or 3 big ideas, and a short end.
content
For each idea, give a reason and one small example to show it.
coherence
Use link words to show how ideas go, like first, then, also, but.
language
Check your spell and use easy words; try to make your sentences simple.
content
You talk about the topic and you try to give a fix.
structure
You show that the question has two parts and you begin to answer them.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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