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Band 1

Parents are trying to learn how to take care of their children. Is this essential? Give your opinion on this and illustrate an example.

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Introduction
Parents are trying to learn how to take
care
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 of their
children
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. Is
this
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 essential?
Body paragraph 1
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First of all,
 there are
to
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too
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 many ways to
teak
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teach
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 a but
this
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qouschen
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question
. For
me
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me,
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its
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it's
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vere
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very
 important
the
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that the
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 mother and father know
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how for
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for
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to
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care
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of
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for
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 their
children
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,
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. For
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for
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example
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example,
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 if you have a
chailed
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child
 and you know
to
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how to
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care
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from
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for
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 him
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, it
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it
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it's
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 good for your
live
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also
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, also
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 the
cheildren
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children
Body paragraph 2
It
between
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is between
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children
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to
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that
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teniger
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ten
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important
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an important
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 time to draw the future.
Body paragraph 3
In
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On
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 the
anutherhand
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other hand
, we can look to the prison
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I
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 know
to
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too
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 many
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criminals
it
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the
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a
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reail
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real
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it
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 was
separation the
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the separation
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parents
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of parents
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, because
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it
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is
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big
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a big
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 problem for the world
Body paragraph 4
I think the most dingeer people
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apply
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have like
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Conclusion
In the conclusion, we have to do something to
laern
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teach
 the parents before they have
a
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apply
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children
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if
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them
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they
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wnat
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want
 a good
family
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family,
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 they should
to
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apply
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care
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abut
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about
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children
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.

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Task response
The essay does not clearly answer the task. Say your own view in the first paragraph and give reasons.
Coherence
Plan your writing. Use a short intro with your view, two body parts with ideas, and a short finish.
Coherence
Use clear topic sentences and link ideas with simple words like and, but, also.
Language
Write short sentences with correct spelling. Do not try to use big words you are not sure of.
Content
Give one real example about how a parent care for a child to show your point.
Content
Some idea that parents should learn to care for children is shown.
Potential
The topic is clear and important.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • care
  • child
  • parent
  • family
  • love
  • learn
  • need
  • safe
  • healthy
  • happy
  • rules
  • routine
  • plan
  • talk
  • listen
  • calm
  • help
  • time
  • guide
  • example
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