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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the
generally
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general
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 change
of
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in
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 the type of fast food taken by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Which
is
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are
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pizza
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, fish and chips, and hamburgers.
Overall
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,
pizza
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 and hamburgers have
the
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apply
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similarly
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rose
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risen
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 in these 15 years.
On the other hand
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, fish and chips fell significantly from 1985. First of all, the
numbers
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number
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 of
eating
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times of eating
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times
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 of
pizza
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 increased steadily, from around 10
times
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 in 1975 to more than 80
times
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 in 2000.
Furthermore
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, for hamburgers, which have much more but
similar
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similar,
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 increased with
pizza
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. From 15
times
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 in 1975 to 100
times
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 in 200.
However
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, fish and chips is the only one which
have
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has
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 a
sharply
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sharp
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 drop, from 100
times
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 in 1975 to 85
times
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 in 1980. And return to around 90
times
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 in 1985, but have
a
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apply
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significantly declined from 90
times
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 in 1985 to 40
times
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 in 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rise
  • increase
  • grow
  • go up
  • upward
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • dip
  • steady
  • stable
  • sharp
  • gradual
  • total
  • amount
  • year
  • period
  • types
  • burgers
  • pizza
  • fried chicken
  • chips
  • snack
  • share
  • part
  • portion
  • most
  • least
  • dominant
  • ask
  • trend
  • paraphrase words: graph shows
  • in general
  • compared with
  • during
  • throughout
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