Many animal species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities. What are the causes and possible solutions to this problem?

Nowadays, it can be seen that human-induced climate
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has an especially significant impact on animal species. Two significant reasons behind
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problem are advancing technology and an increasing population. To address animal extinction, it is essential to curb greenhouse gases and prevent land-use changes. Technology advancement remains a major obstacle to endangered animals because, after introducing technology, the usage of fossil fuels has surged dramatically.
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, the number of private cars has increased, resulting in the emission of greenhouse gases increasing too. To effectively combat
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problem, a solution must directly curb emissions. One key strategy is investing in renewable energy-source devices
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of fossil-fuel ones.
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, these days electric cars have become more popular, since they work with clean energy. Another pressing cause of the extinction of animal species is the increase in population.
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, individuals have to
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land use to build accommodation for themselves.
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, many natural habitats in recent years have become urban areas. To address
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issue, protecting habitat is vital.
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, the government can fund builders to
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apartments and private houses to skyscrapers in order to provide accommodations for residents with lower land
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to other kinds of accommodations. In conclusion, increasing reliance on fossil fuels and land-use
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has caused the extinction of animals.
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, fortunately, practical solutions are available. Using e-vehicles to avoid carbon-intensive transportation and building high-rise buildings to avoid deforestation are two effective approaches to protect animals.

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Task response
Task response: The essay covers the topic but does not give clear links between causes and ideas. State one clear reason for the problem, then give a direct fix. Add a short example for each fix.
Coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use a clear flow. Start with a short intro, then two body parts (causes, then fixes), then a short conclusion. Use linking words like first, next, also, and however to join ideas.
Content
The topic is on the same theme and the writer tries to use examples.
Language
Some real examples are used to show the fix.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • home for animals
  • forests
  • roads
  • towns
  • farming
  • hunting
  • illegal trade
  • pollution
  • waste
  • climate change
  • weak laws
  • enforcement
  • protected areas
  • parks
  • education
  • awareness
  • jobs for local people
  • eco-friendly farming
  • restoring land
  • breeding programs
  • international cooperation
  • sustainable use
  • conserve nature
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