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Band 4

Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transports system. To what extend do you agree?

Nowadays, from my point of view, the population believes that investing more in infrastructure
it
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is more important
that
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than
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spend
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spending
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 money on buses and trains. I want to express my
totally agree
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 with
this
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 idea. One of the main
proint
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points
 here
,
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 is that the construction
in
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 roads, bridges and highways is really important for the development of any country,
specially
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 if
you
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your
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 country
had
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 the budget and
spend
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spends
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 money
in develop
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on developing
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this path
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. I would like to add
if
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that if
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 you
dosen’t
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don’t
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 have a good infrastructure
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,
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is not
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it doesn't
 make
sence
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sense
 to invest in public
transports
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transport
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 or any other service. In
additional
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 to
that
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that,
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 I would like to mention
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some news I heard a couple of days ago, the Ministry of New Zealand has approved a budget for construction and
expand
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 the main highway to connect the
north island
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North Island
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 to
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the south
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south island
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South Island
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.
On the other hand
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 , we know that
the
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public
Transports
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transportation
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 is very important for any city in the
word
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, especially
that
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a
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 city with
larg
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large
 congestion traffic and pollution
on
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in
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 the air. Most of the government and people know about the care environment , and one of the main
solution
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solutions
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 is that people get public
transports
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transport
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 to get the
job
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work
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,
rider
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,
even
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or even
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 visit
some
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a
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 friend
o
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or
relative
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. In conclusion , with
this
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 essay I support
that
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 idea
to
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of
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 investing in infrastructure and
spend
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spending
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 the money
for
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on
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 the annual budget , before
start
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starting
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 any investment in
the
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buses, trains,
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or subway
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subway
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subways
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. I very important
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for to
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to people
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people to
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 have
a
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good roads and motorways to travel to work every day in good condition and safe for everybody.

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task
Make your main idea clear at the start. Stick to one point you want in the essay, and add the best reasons to back it up.
grammar
Use shorter, simple sentences. A few ideas per paragraph help the reader.
coherence
Use small link words like and, but, also, then to move from one idea to the next.
examples
Give one clear example that fits your point and explain it in two lines.
stance
You show you have a clear view on the topic.
content
You try to give an example to back your idea.
content
Your hope to give reasons on why roads are useful is seen.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spend
  • money
  • roads
  • road
  • motorways
  • public transport
  • bus
  • train
  • car
  • time
  • cost
  • benefit
  • city
  • town
  • country
  • people
  • traffic
  • pollution
  • air
  • safe
  • move
  • travel
  • plan
  • design
  • maintain
  • build
  • connect
  • rural
  • urban
  • budget
  • policy
  • future
  • balance
  • mix
  • priority
  • affordable
  • growth
  • economy
  • jobs
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