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The table below shows the average weekly salaries of men and of women working in different occupations.

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show
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comparative
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 between
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the wage
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wage
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wages
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 of
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man
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men
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 and
of
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women
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 in
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several jobs in
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various
specialties
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specialities
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 in 2015. When looking, we will notice that
an
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 average
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salaries
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salary
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 of
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man
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men rises
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 in
the
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one
week
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 very rise ,
whereas
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the wage
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wage
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wages
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 of
women
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 drop significantly in
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one
week
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. At the beginning of the working
man
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 in the
technicals
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technical
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 it is considered it
salaries
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higher
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are higher
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 in the
week
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 around 1400 ,
while
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women
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women's
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wage
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wages
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 in the same
specialty
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speciality
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 law about 900 in 2015.
Furthermore
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 of
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man
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men
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labor
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apply
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in professional they receive
salaries
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 in the
week
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 nearly 2000, but compared to
women
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approximately
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, approximately
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 1900 .
On the other hand
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, Average weekly wages by jobs in 2014. Some
specialties
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specialities
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it
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apply
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give
decline
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a decline
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 in
the
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salaries
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like
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, like
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 as
,
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apply
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manual
laborers
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labourers
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 of
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man
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men
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,
they
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who
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 get in
the
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apply
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one
week
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 almost 1100 . Through of the woman they are paid very
weak
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weakly
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in the same occupation of the
man
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 some 850 in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words man, women, salaries, week with synonyms.
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