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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the production
process
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 of instant
noodles
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. It consists of several steps, from the very first ingredient until it is ready to be shipped and consumed by the community. The first stage begins by acquiring the main
thing
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ingredient
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which
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, which
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 is flour. It is stored in the silos, so it has to be transported to the production machine. Once the flour is ready, it is introduced to a mixture of water and oil, and
those
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that
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 combination is mixed by using a mixer to form
dough
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.
Following
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this
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,
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dough
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the dough
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 is processed through rollers
resulting
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, resulting
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 in a thinner shape and is put on
dough
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 sheets. Afterwards, it enters the
dough
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 strips machine and undergoes
stripping
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a stripping
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process
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, which results in longer and smaller
dough
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.
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strips.
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 The next
process
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 aims to put the
dough
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 into
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noodles
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noodle
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 discs, so that it stays in
circular
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a circular
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 shape. Those half-way
noodles
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then
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enters
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enter
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 the cooking area
which
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, which
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 consists of boiling oil, and
is
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are
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 cooked and dried before going to the next
process
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.
Noodles
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then
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 go in through
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the pacakging
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pacakging
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packaging
 apparatus and
being
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are
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 packed separately
to
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into
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 little cups, forming a single portion for
one time
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one-time
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 consumption. After that, vegetables and spices are added to each of the cups, and they are labelled and sealed thoroughly.
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, the cup
instant
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of instant
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noodles
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are
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is
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 ready to ship to customers.
Overall
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, the manufacture of instant
noodles
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comprise
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comprises
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of
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apply
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eight sophisticated procedures. They are grouped
to
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into
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 three main stages,
such
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 as preparing the flour as the raw and main ingredients, mixing with several additional things, and
finalizing
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finalising
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 with packages and labels.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, noodles, dough with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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