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Band 2.5

Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

In
the
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recent
years
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years,
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 the subject of keeping or
destroing
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destroying
 the old downtown building
,
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 has sparked widespread debate. In my view, the old buildings,
specially
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 the ones that are built in the core of the town or
city
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city,
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 should be
conservated
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conserved
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.
Firstly
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, these buildings represent a statement or a
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 of the history. It is generally accepted that
the
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people are interested and want to preserve their
history
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history,
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that
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 serves as a statement of their origins.
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, the citizens can be the
withnesses
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witnesses
 of the cultural
curent
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current
 of the previous generation, giving them the
posibility
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possibility
 to get in touch with the past
curents
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currents
 of architecture and art.
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this
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, we should preserve the old construction simply because
they
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it
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have
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 a special beauty given by the time flow.
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, it is a pleasure to visit
Toronto downtown
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downtown Toronto
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 to visit or just to pass by the old St. James Cathedral on King Street
surounded
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surrounded
 by newly constructed skyscrapers. Even more, the
downtowns
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downtowns'
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 reach in ancient vestiges can
contibute
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contribute
 to the municipality's economy consistently, attracting a huge number of visitors.
This
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 unwritten real statement of time
pass
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,
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constitutes
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 itself as a source of study and solution for the present generation. In conclusion, the old buildings are part of the settlement itself.
Destroyng thi
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Destroying this
 essential component would mean extracting its heart.

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structure
Have a clear plan. Say your view in one line at the start. Then give 2-3 strong reasons.
coherence
Use 1 idea per paragraph. Start with a small idea and finish with a line that links to the next idea.
content
Add one or two short facts or real examples to support each point.
structure
Write a short intro that shows your view and a short ending that restates it.
language
Check spelling and word use. Use simple words and avoid long forms. Replace 'destroing' with 'destroying' and 'conservated' with 'preserved'.
strength
The essay shows a clear view.
strength
Some good ideas about why old buildings can be kept.
strength
A real city example is used.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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