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he chart below shows the percentage of households with internet access in a certain country in 2014 and 2024. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The aim of
this
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 report is to present
internet
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access
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of
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in
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 households in some EU
countries
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. The data in
this
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 bar chart shows
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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,
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Lithuania's
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Lithuania
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,
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Bulgaria's
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and Bulgaria's
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internet
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access
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 in 2014 and in 2024, a
10 year
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 gap.
Overall
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, it can be seen that results vary from 2014 and 2024. In
2014
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2014,
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Lithuania
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 had only about 68% of
internet
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access
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,
whereas
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Bulgaria
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 had even less, about 58% of
internet
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access
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.
However
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, coming into
2024
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2024,
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 both
countries
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 ,
that
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which
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 I have mentioned earlier,
did
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took
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 a big step up toward
internet
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access
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 and rose all the way to 90% and above. In
2024
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2024,
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Lithuania
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 had 90% of
internet
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access
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,
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;
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however
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however,
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Bulgaria
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 rose a little bit more, to 92% of
internet
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access
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 in 2024. Looking back at
2014
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2014,
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internet
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access
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 in
Lithuania
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 and
Bulgaria
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, we can clearly see a massive improvement
from
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in
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 both
countries
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.
Lithuania
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 went from 68% to 90% of
internet
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access
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and
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, and
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Bulgaria
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 went from 58% all the way to 92% , which is more impressive than
Lithuania
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's rise
of
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in
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internet
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access
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.
Nonetheless
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, let's not forget the
Netherlands
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. In
2014
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2014,
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 the
Netherlands
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 had a huge 96% of
internet
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access
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. Coming into 2024,
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 did not improve a lot, yet still rose about 3%, which gave them a staggering 99% of
internet
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access
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.
In contrast
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, the
Netherlands
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 took the top spot, that's because they have not dropped their
internet
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access
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 below 90% and kept above 95% of
internet
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access
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 in that
10 year
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 gap.
Bulgaria
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 claims the middle spot, since they improved their
internet
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access
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 the most out of the other two
countries
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 (
Lithuania
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 and
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 ), going from 58% the whole way to 92% of
internet
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access
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.
Finally
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, the
last
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 place
comes
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goes
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 to
Lithuania
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. They would be in the middle spot if they had improved more than
Bulgaria
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. Generally,
internet
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access
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 rose in all three EU
countries
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 throughout the years. The
Netherlands
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 remained the country with the highest rating of
internet
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access
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,
while
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Bulgaria
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 experienced a significant growth.
Lithuania
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also
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 advanced,
although
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 it did not match either
Bulgaria
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 or
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, access, countries, netherlands, lithuania, bulgaria with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • percent
  • households
  • internet access
  • chart
  • data
  • figure
  • point
  • percentage points
  • increase
  • rise
  • growth
  • grow
  • climb
  • jump
  • rise sharply
  • steady
  • gradual
  • rapid
  • significant
  • notable
  • higher
  • lower
  • more
  • less
  • gap
  • difference
  • overall
  • in general
  • in 2014
  • in 2024
  • compared with
  • urban
  • rural
  • region
  • reason
  • effect
  • cause
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