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Traveling in a group assisted by a tour guide is the best way to travel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this assertion?

There is an opinion that
traveling
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 with a team assisted by a
tour
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guide
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 is
the
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 great way to travel. Personally, I agree with
this
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an
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opinion because with a
tour
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guide
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 is the best way to find out
information
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 about historical places or at the museum. When it comes to the traveling to another a
city
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 or a
country
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 with a
tour
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guide
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 is a bit awkward, because whenever you want to go to somewhere where is very beautiful and interesting place you wanted and you have planned before going to there , but a
tour
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guide
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 is cannot bring you to there, because they make their own rules and plans before catching the visitor which are coming from abroad. So
that
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traveling
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 with a
tour
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guide
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 is unpleasant and boring. I,
however
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, believe that
traveling
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 in a group assisted by a
tour
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guide
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 is the best way to travel, for a
tour
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guide
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 is familiar with all places that you visit,
where
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whether
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 might be a
city
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 or a
country
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and
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, and
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 they have more
information
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 than you about the
country
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 or a
city
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. The
tour
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guide
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is
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can help you to gain knowledge about historical places and past years;
also
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 help to find a cheaper
an
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accommodation to rest
which
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, which
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 is fit
your
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for your
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 budget.
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, if I visit
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somewhere that I do not know any
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 about a place or a
country
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 I want to get a
tour
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guide
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 to get more
information
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 about
a
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 place. In conclusion,
while
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 getting a
tour
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guide
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 to find out a
city
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 or a
country
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 is a bit awkward,
but
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as I mentioned above
taking
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, taking
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 a
tour
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guide
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 is more helpful than
without
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going without
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 a
guide
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.

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structure
Make your view clear in the intro and restate it in the end.
content
Give one main idea per paragraph and add a clear example or fact to support it.
grammar
Use simple words and short sentences. Check for small mistakes that can change meaning.
planning
Keep a simple plan. Do not mix many ideas in one paragraph.
task
You make a clear view that you agree with.
content
You note how a guide can give knowledge and help save cost.
coherence
There is some linking and order in your writing.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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