Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more
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on our personality and development than any
experiences
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we may have in our
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life
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. Which do you consider to be the major
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? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. One of the issues that has been causing
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debates and discussions in psychology for many years is the
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of genetics versus environment on human
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. I would like to point out that
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experiences
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and environmental influences
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development in
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rather than innate characteristics. On the one hand, some characteristic is inherited,
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some temperament, cognitive potential, musical aptitude and other similar inborn
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. Undoubtedly,
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a decisive role
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a biological inheritance identity.
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raw materials. Because of the fact that, among
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not
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stimulation, if new opportunities are not created, the chance to reach full potential is lost.
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, talent alone is not enough, as the
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of the environment is
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vital
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other words,
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experiences
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of personality.In education,
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unlearning
, social interactions are
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developing
inborn talent.
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,a child with athletic potential will not become a professional athlete without rigorous training, discipline and mentorship.
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some
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, resilience,
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are not hereditary factors.
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experiences
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. In conclusion, inborn talents are helping
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character
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is a crucial
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experience
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environmental influences. They
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not only cultivate abilities but
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values and skills.
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life
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experiences
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ultimately define who we become.

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State your view clearly and keep to it. Give reasons and simple examples.
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strength
The essay shows a clear view that life experiences can shape a person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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