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The table below shows daily oil production in 4 countries from 2000 to 2004.

The given table
depict
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 the information about the daily
oil
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 preparation in Nigeria,
Chad
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,
Congo
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 and Somalia from 2000 to 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest number of
oil
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barrels
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 per day was
prepared
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produced
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 by
Congo
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 across the given time span, with the exception of the final
year
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.
In contrast
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, the lowest sum of
barrel
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barrels
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 was reported by
Chad
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. In 2000,
Congo
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 produced the largest number of
oil
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barrels
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 daily, which accounted for 275,000. Meanwhile, Nigeria
prepared
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produced
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 70,000
barrels
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 less than that
by
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of
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Congo
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, accounting for 205,000 in the same
year
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.
Additionally
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, the lowest figure was reported by
Chad
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, in which
,
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 none of the
barrels
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recorded
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were recorded
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. It is evident that, during the next two years, the given countries experienced a significant fall
of
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in
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oil
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 production,
while
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 Somalia showed a clear rise, which was over three times higher than that in its initial
year
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. It is noteworthy that in 2003,
Chad
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 produced its first 8 thousand
oil
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barrels
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, which
was
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peaked at 50,000 in the next
year
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, reporting
the
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a
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 similar figure as Somalia in 2004. Despite Nigeria
showed
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showing
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 a rise in
oil
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 production, peaking
at
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in
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 2004, which accounted for 213 thousand,
Congo
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 continued to steadily decline over
the
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apply
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time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, chad, congo, barrels, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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