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The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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 the information
of
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 the age of the members and the total
loans
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 by category in 2016; the total
numbers
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number
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 of
loans
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 from 2007 to 2016 for Little Chalfont Library.
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primarily
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 members of the library
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 adults
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aged 18 to 64, and the fiction for
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adults
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 and children were the main items
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 the loan category. The sum of
loans
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 fluctuated from 2007 to 2016. In 2016, the age composition of the library members
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 composed
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the
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adults
in
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aged 18 to 64 , which was 51% for
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the largest
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 proportion in the chart. The remained parts based on the sequences
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 22% for children, the teenagers aged 13 to 17 for 15%, and the seniors aged 65 and over for 12%. Meanwhile,
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 the distribution for total
loans
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, the portion of
loans
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 for
children
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children's
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 orientation
items
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items,
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included
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 fiction, non-fiction, and DVDs were occupied 45%; the
percentages
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percentage
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 of adult parts
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was
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 53%. In the sum of
loans
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 from 2007 to 2016, the trend was 16,000 for
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the lowest
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 point in all period. In 2008, the numbers rose to
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 20,000 and plateaued in 2009. In 2010
begin
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, the
amounts
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amount
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 was over 20,000 and fluctuated in other
year
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years
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,
excepted
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 in 2013
slight
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 decreased.
Utimately
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Ultimately
, the trend reached the peak in 2016 for approximately 22,000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words loans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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