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Band 4

The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The maps below
offers
Correct subject-verb agreement
offer
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 some changes
of city
Correct word order
city of
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 Darwin a
particular
Replace the word
particularly
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 at the waterfront
between
Punctuation problem
, between
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 2009 and 2014.
Overall
Linking Words
,the most striking transformation was the
change
Check wording
apply
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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addition swimming pool,
Linking Words
also
Rephrase
as well as
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Correct article usage
the universally
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universally
Replace the word
universal
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 building and many trees in the waterfront. In 2009 , was
area
Use synonyms
 of town Darwin in the west
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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has
fishing
Correct article usage
a fishing
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area
Use synonyms
 and
swimming
Correct article usage
a swimming
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 pool next to
sea
Correct article usage
the sea
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 .
While
Linking Words
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 in the north convenience
center
Change the spelling
centre
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 on the right
there
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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is
school
Correct article usage
a school
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but
Punctuation problem
, but
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 in the middle the lake and
industrial
Correct article usage
an industrial
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area
Use synonyms
 with some trees . In the south
another
Punctuation problem
, another
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 industrial
area
Use synonyms
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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is overlooked by a street.
However
Linking Words
,presence
footpath
Correct article usage
a footpath
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in
Change preposition
at
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 the end of
city
Correct article usage
the city
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. In 2014,
Linking Words
this
Fix the agreement mistake
these
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 changes
of
Change preposition
in
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 the ears of
a
Correct article usage
the
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 town Darwin
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 the disappearance industrial
area
Use synonyms
Linking Words
in
Punctuation problem
, in
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 addition to
footpath
Correct article usage
a footpath
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 ,
also
Linking Words
 there is
universal
Correct article usage
a universal
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 building in the east .
Moreover
Linking Words
 of building
harbour
Correct article usage
a harbour
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 In the west and planting many trees between these is a walkway
connecte
Correct your spelling
connecting
 the harbour and the street . Adding
the
Correct article usage
a
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 swimming pool next to the lake.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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