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some people think that students should only study science subjects. other subjects are not important to them. to what extent do you agree or disagree with tis opinion

Some people
agrue
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argue
 that
students
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 should only study
science
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subjects
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, other
subjects
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 are not that important.
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i
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I
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 agree
with
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that
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science
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subjects
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 are more useful for getting
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a
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 nice position,
i
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I
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 think that
students
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also
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 need to study other
subjects
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 for other skills. On the one hand,
science
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subjects
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 for now have
more
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a more
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 important status
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the
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apply
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economic development and have more opportunities for
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jobs
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. At the time,
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apply
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according to
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 AI will
develope
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develop
quickly
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quickly,
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then
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 the company needs
the
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a
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 talented person who can help them create
AI
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an AI
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bluemap
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blueprint
.
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, for
now
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 the
global
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globally
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 known company Nvidia
who
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, who
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 dedicate
AI
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to AI
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development
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development,
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 is looking for
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apply
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talented
person
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people
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 worldwide
,
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;
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 they
also
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 need to find the person who have
the
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a
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science
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scientific
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bakcground
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background
 to help them do these things.
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, the
science
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subjects
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 can help the
students
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 gain
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knowledge about the world,
such
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 as
global
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the global
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 warming, glaciers melting problem.
This
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mean
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means
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 that
science
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subjects
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 can let
students
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adress
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address
 the worldwide issue and understand what's truly happening right now.
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,
science
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 is not the only
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subjects
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subject
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 which
students
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 need to learn in school. A variety of
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subject
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subjects
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 can help
students
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 find
the
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other
hobby
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hobbies
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 and
interest
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interests
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.
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,
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a sport
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sport
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sports
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 subject can
develope
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develop
student
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students
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 when they
stress
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are stressed
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for
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about
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 something
else
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else,
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 they can learn how to
released
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release
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 the stress
by
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the
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a
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 good way.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, other
subjects
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 can
let
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bring
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 you
close
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closer
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 to the world,
such
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 as
english
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English
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subjects
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 or other language
subjects
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 can
let
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help
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 you understand what's
happen
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happening
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 in the world.
To conclude
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,
although
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i
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I
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 agree that
science
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subjects
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 are important,
i
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I
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 believe that a good
currculum
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curriculum
 should be broad and balanced, covering a wide range of areas.

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grammar
Improve grammar and spelling to avoid unclear meaning.
coherence
Use more linking words to show how ideas go to others.
content
Make one clear point at a time and give a simple example for each.
vocabulary
Check key words like develop, background, address.
structure
Keep a clear intro and a short conclusion, and restate your main idea.
content
The answer shows a real view and tries to balance science with other subjects.
structure
There is a plan with an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
content
An attempt is made to give a conclusion.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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