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Band 2.5

Some people believe that advertisements have a negative impact on society, while others think they are helpful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no
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denying
 the fact that advertisements have its effect on
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the community
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.
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 some
people
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 think that it has a negative impact,
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others
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 believe that
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 essential. In my opinion, I think it can have both positive and negative impacts. On the one hand,
adertisements
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advertisements
is
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are
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 considered to be one
the
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of the
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 most needed in our
life
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lives
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.
its
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It's
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 very essential
especially
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, especially
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 for
people
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 who have
buisness
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business
 work.
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, in some sectors
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it's
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 needed to raise their income and popularity. 
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, Companies, restaurants,
stores
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and stores
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,
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apply
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 use it to attract more customers by
offeing
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offering
 special events, new sales or discount
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codes
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.
On the other hand
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,
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one
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 of the major negative
effect
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effects
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 on society is that it leads
people
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 to buy something which may not be
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apply
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necessary.
Furthermore
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,
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some
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 owners can't
adervtise
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advertise
due to
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 their money limits. So,
somtimes
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sometimes
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it's
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 unfair for
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 having an excellent quality of products and
in
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at
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 the same time can't
adertise
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advertise
 that. In conclusion,
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although
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 some
people
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 think that
advertisments
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advertisements
 have a detrimental effect on citizens, I agree with them, but
in
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at
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 the same time it can
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affect
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people
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's profit positively. If
advertisments
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advertisements
 can be bought
by
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for
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affordable
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an affordable
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amount
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amount,
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 it will be fair for most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
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.

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task response
Your essay tries to show both sides and says your view. Put your position in the first paragraph and restate in the end.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like also, but, and, for example, to show how ideas are connected.
grammar
Many grammar and spelling errors make the meaning hard to see. Check these mistakes: use 'advertisements' not 'adertisements', 'their', 'they', and 'are' correctly.
structure
Use short, clear sentences. Do not join many ideas into one long sentence.
content
The essay tries to talk about both sides and has a clear plan.
structure
It has a start, a middle, and an end.
content
It gives some example of how ads can help business.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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