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Band 3

The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo.

The graph demonstrates the process
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by that
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that
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which
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 bamboo
transform
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is transformed
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to
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into
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 fabric clothes. The whole process has nine steps. At the beginning, bamboo has to
plant
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be planted
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 in the spring, and the harvest season is autumn. It only takes half a year. After harvest, the bamboos will be cut into strips and
then
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 crushed in order to make
liquid
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a liquid
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 pump.
The next step is
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filter
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to filter
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 these crushed strips, which can separate long fibres out. All these steps are the first stage
about
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of
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this
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 action. The rough fibres are very hard
so
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, so
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 they have to be
soften
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softened
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, which
need to add
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requires adding
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 water and a material called amine oxide. When they become soft enough, they can be
spin
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spun
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 to make yarn
which
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, which
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 can
weave
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be woven
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 and
make
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made
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 into
fibric
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fabric
 cloth. In the end,
these
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this
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fibric
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fabric
cloth
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apply
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can make
T-shirt
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T-shirts
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, socks, and so on.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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