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Writing Samples
Band 1

You are participating in an online discussion for language learners. The question is: Young people today are less interested in culture. Discuss the causes of this trend and impact on society.

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 Begin ! It is often argued that young people today show less interest in
culture
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 compared to previous generations. Several causes,
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 mostly lost
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culture
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cultural
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 value
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Firstly
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, the rapid growth of technology and social media.
Nowadays
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 many parents
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apply
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works
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 for
household
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the household
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 and circumstances
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 go
works
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all days
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, they don’t spend their
times
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for
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her
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childrens
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children
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then
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childrens
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children
 will be less
interest
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interested
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the
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in the
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culture
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.morewer
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 they take street cultures. Street
culture
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 leads children in a negative direction, playing games late at night
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.and
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and
 they
lost
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lose
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culture
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cultural
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value
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values
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.
each
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 country
have
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 many
calture
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cultural
 values
in
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Uzbekistan
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Uzbekistan,
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have
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it has
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ones
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. To respect elders and show kindness to youngsters, when elders come to the buses ,
youngers
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youngsters
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 must give
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your
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their
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 place .
if
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 elder grandparents have strong bags,
youngers
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younger
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help
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people help
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 to lift the bags ,
everthing
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everything
 here
Uzbekistan
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in Uzbekistan
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 values .
everything
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Everything
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connect
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 parents .

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task
Plan your work. A short start, one plan, clear points, and a short end.
coherence
Use linking words to show order. For example, First, Also, But, In the end.
structure
Keep one idea in each part. Use short, plain sentences. Check grammar and verb form.
content
The essay mentions tech and street life as a cause.
example
It uses a local example from Uzbek culture.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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