Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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years, problems like environment, population and
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have raised serious concerns. In my country, during the
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ten years, especially the demographic changes and educational
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the most discussed. Environmental protection,
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of the most urgent matters, is
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still its impact is huge. There are measures that the government can
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the percentage of
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has decreased in the
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almost half a
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we have the people
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choose to emigrate. These two major directions have economic causes
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poverty, generated mainly by inflation. To overcome
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a healthy economic
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. A second reason is the lack of
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the
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year test for the twelve grade has proven that around 10
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of the absolvents are
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functionally illiterate
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. The
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education
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was having great results in the past, with
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around the world. During the
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the performance has significantly decreased. To improve the performance, the
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administration has to reform the public educational system starting from its roots.
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that the majority of the conationals are not aware of, is environmental degradation. In conclusion, the population and the
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are two main
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issues
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that Romania encounters. Only by raising the economy and improving the
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system quality, they might be solved.

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task response
Plan your essay. State three big problems clearly, then give a simple plan for each one. End with a short closing idea.
coherence cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main idea and a clear start. Use linking words like firstly, next, and finally to show the order. Check that links refer to the same idea.
content strength
The essay talks about real problems in your country.
structure
There is a conclusion that sums up ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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