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The line graph illustrates the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart presents key information about the number of margarine,
low
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low-fat
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 fat and reduced spreads and butter that people needed between 1981 to 2007. The units are measured in grams.
Overall
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, it is clear from the
gragh
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graph
 that butter decreased over the period.
In addition
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, margarine fluctuated
fom
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from
 the beginning of the period until the end.
While
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low fat
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low-fat
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 and reduced spreads increased sharply
and
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, and
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 it declined slightly.
According to
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 what is shown,the green line started from the top in
140g-in
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140 g in
 1981,next it
incrased
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increased
 to 160 the following 5 years
and
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, and
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then
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 it dropped to around 50g in 2007.
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However
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However,
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low fat
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low-fat
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 and reduced spreads
begun
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began
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 from about 10 g and
it
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apply
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grew dramatically to 80
gram
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g
 in 2001.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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