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Some people believe that having a large family with three or more children brings many advantages, while others argue that it creates serious challenges for parents and children.

In modern societies, having a small family with fewer than three
children
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 has become increasingly common.
People
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 play important roles in building and developing the future generation. Some parents prefer to be calm with a few number of
children
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,
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 others tend to have a large family.
This
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 essay will discuss some advantages and disadvantages of a large family with 3
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 or more. There are several advantages of having
large
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a large
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numbers
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 of
children
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. One benefit is emotional support.
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 means that when
people
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 become elderly, they need to be surrounded by others
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who
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 care about them.
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, parents who have many
children
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 are often less likely to feel isolated or lonely.
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, parents with many
children
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 always enjoy stronger emotional support and
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 of belonging. Another significant benefit is financial and educational encouragement.
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 is because having a big family encourages
people
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 to be able to cover and support their
children
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’s
needs
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needs,
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 whether financial or educational.
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according to
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people
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 who tend to have a large family are more likely to
study
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pursue
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high
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higher
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 education and try to create
own
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their own
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 businesses more than others.

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content
Add a balance view by also writing about the downs of a large family.
structure
Use a clear topic sentence for each paragraph and link ideas with simple words.
accuracy
Give real and true examples, not ones from a made up name.
structure
End with a short conclusion that sums up both sides.
structure
The essay has a clear start and a plan to discuss points.
coherence
Some good linking words are used to show steps.
content
Basic idea is easy to see.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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