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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think iot is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Shining sports athletes are able to gain a sterling contract many times more than
person
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 in other activities. Some of them think it's unfair and others
don;t
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don't
. In
this
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 essay,
i'm
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I'm
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 going to discuss and highlight the and formulate my opinion. Indeed, they earn more than people in conventional
enrollements
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enrollments
due to
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 their capacity
of generating
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to generate
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high
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a high
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amout
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amount
 of revenue through their image as many people watch their performances and games.
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, they are able to make
publicities
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publicity
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 partnerships with franchises, many companies, food and drink industries.
Beside
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this
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, they can sell products linked to their personal brands, which is very profitable and
also
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 make
money
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 out of their
respectively
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 public. Some think it's unfair because they don't see the palpable
beneficts
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benefits
 within our society as a doctor, or lawyer, or other professions that help in the development and
mantainance
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maintenance
 of our society as a whole. Despite being noble activities, they
itself
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themselves
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 cannot generate or multiply
money
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 because they are in the
classe
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class
 of employed or
passively
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money
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 receptors,
while
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 the other group are in the
classe
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class
 of
money
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 generators,
jobs
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job
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 creation, and high investment scope,
that's
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that is
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 why they
benefict
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benefit
 from larger amounts of
money
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 in their contracts.
In other words
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, they have the skill to make and move
money
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, and develop the economy and
a
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large-scale impact. In conclusion,
i
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I
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 think it's fair because of what they can do in terms of significant impact
in
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on
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 our society.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear map. Write an opening line, three body paragraphs, and a short ending.
coherence
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a clear topic sentence and end with a short note.
grammar
Use simple grammar and check common mistakes. Teach your key spellings and verb forms.
development
Give examples that fit the idea. Keep them simple and close to real life.
proofreading
Check you have the right form of words like its/it's and use of apostrophes.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides of the issue.
stance
The writer adds a personal view at the end.
ideas
Some ideas show how money comes from sport, such as ads and brand deals.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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