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Band 3.5

As computers translate quickly and accurately, some people think that learning foreign languages is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, there has been a growing debate about whether we should keep learning foreign languages or just let state-of-the-art
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tools
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 do all of the jobs. Personally, I believe that learning a foreign
language
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 can significantly change personal way of thinking and enhance knowledge. Nowadays, with rapid digital products and artificial intelligence development, numerous convenient
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tools
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 or apps dominate the market
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 these products can provide accurate answers in a few seconds or even real-time
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. These technologies address the limitation of human
languages skill
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, as it clrealy that no one can be proficient in every
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.
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 a result,
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tools
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 have become extremely important
tools
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 for people to communicate more easily across countries,
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 the gap between different cultures in a globalisation world.
On the other hand
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, learning a
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 can bring
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 obvious life improvement, even though it may require considerable time and effort, but some studies have indicated that a bilingual normally has better memory and attention,
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 are
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 less likely to develop Alzheimer's disease.
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, it is easy for a bilingual to explore different cultures and establish various friendships
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 these experiences can broaden their horizons and strengthen their skills.
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, they are likely to gain more opportunities in society, earn a higher income and be valued by the industry. In conclusion,
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 technology is already mature, learning a foreign
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 is still very beneficial
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 people can acquire more resources, valuable experience and precious opportunities.

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language
Fix big grammar and spelling errors. Use simple, clear form. Read aloud to check.
language
Make sentences short. Avoid long, run-on lines. One idea per sentence where possible.
structure
Group your ideas in three clear parts: intro, two body parts with ideas, and a short ending. Each part has its main idea.
content
Give two or three clear reasons. Add a simple example for each reason. Do not say 'studies show' without a real example.
language
Check spellings like clrealy, Asas, globalisation; use correct form: clearly, and globalisation or globalized.
content
The writer shows a clear view that learning a language is useful.
content
Some good reasons are given, like memory and culture.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Machine translation
  • Nuance
  • Bilingualism
  • Cognitive development
  • Global job market
  • Cross-cultural
  • Technological dependence
  • Language proficiency
  • Cultural identity
  • Authentic interactions
  • National security
  • Linguistic subtleties
  • Cultural references
  • Emotional undertones
  • Cognitive exercise
  • Mental agility
  • Travel experiences
  • Accuracy in translation
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