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Writing Samples
Band 4

Task1 Write a letter to museum manager.Write about your suggestions for improving the museum, including equipment,activities, and ways of promotion.

Dear Cafe Manager, Thank you for reaching out to
visitors
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 for feedback.I am pleased to share my impressions of my recent visit to your
museum
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.
Overall
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, I enjoyed my visit, but I would like to suggest some improvements that could make the
museum
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 more
atractive
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attractive
 for
visitors
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.
Firstly
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, it would be helpful to add more
visiuable
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visible
 materials
such
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 as
photogrphs
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photographs
, 3D models. These tools can provide detailed information about exhibits and make learning more interesting, especially for young
visitors
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.
Secondly
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, creating a small cafe and seating areas would allow
visitors
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 to
rtelax
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relax
 and spend more time in the
museum
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.
Finally
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,
organizing
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organising
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temrory
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temporary
 exhibitions and educational workshops could attract more people. Thank you for considering my suggestions. I hope the
museum
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 will continue to develop and improve. Your sincerely, John And

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content
For task response, make sure you answer all parts of the task: give ideas on equipment, activities and how to tell people about the place. Add clear steps or ideas you would take.
structure
For coherence and cohesion, keep one idea in each paragraph and use links to show how ideas connect. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic idea.
language
For language, fix spelling and grammar and use the right closing and title. Use a polite and formal tone.
structure
Clear order is shown by the use of 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'Finally'.
tone
The letter is polite and kind in tone.
content
It talks about equipment and activities, not just one thing.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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