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Band 2

In many countries fast food becomes part of life. It affects people’s lifestyle and diet as well. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

In so many countries, fast
food
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 has become the most important and exciting part of people's
life
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lives
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,
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 some believe it affects lifestyle and diet as well. I strongly agree
to
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with
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this
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 statement
and
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, and
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 we will not
further
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 explore its harmful effects in
this
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 essay. One major reason that fast
food
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 encourages
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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 lifestyle is
because
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that
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its
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it's
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 quick and convenient
,
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. Nowadays
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nowadays
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nowadays,
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 people have
got
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no time to cook, so they choose the easiest option there is.
it
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It
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 slowly becomes their routine and
detoriates
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deteriorates
overall
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 health. Another important reason it affects diet is, fast
food
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 contains sugar, salt and fat, which causes harmful effects in
a
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the
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 human body, and a precursor of so many conditions as
,
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apply
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 obesity, hyperstension,
diabetes
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and diabetes
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, it
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. It
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 is common in young adults as they consume it regularly. In my opinion,
government
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the government
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 should take essential steps in the consumption of fast
food
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, by applying
tax
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a tax
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or
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on
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 each product, so people can think before buying, or they can even make vegetables and healthy
food
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staple
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staples
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reasonable
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affordable
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 so that they can move to an alternate option.

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structure
Have a clear plan. Start with your view in the intro and end with a short conclusion.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph and link the ideas with easy words.
content
Explain each idea with real and simple reasons and use easy examples.
language
Check spelling and grammar and use short, simple sentences.
task
Do not clash with the task. If you agree, stay with that view and give a clear result.
content
The writer shows a clear view.
content
Some examples like obesity are named.
structure
There is some link between ideas in parts of the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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