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With the increasing population, communication via the Internet and text messaging, face-to-face communication will become a thing of the past. Agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that the internet and its role in communication
has
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 turned the whole world into a global village.
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, the lack of
in-perosn
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in-person
 talking will become a forgotten thing in
next
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the next
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 few years. I completely agree with the given statement and will discuss the reasons in the following paragraphs. To commence with, addiction is one of the many reasons which will make face-to-face communications more difficult in future. Everyone seems to be glued to their smartphones all the
times
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time
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whether
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 they are working or not, especially youngsters. The large number of social media applications keeps the young minds occupied all the time and makes them addicted to their electronic gadgets.
As a consequence
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,
young
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the young
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 generation prefers texting over talking and finds it really difficult when required to interact face-to-face.
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, automation is another reason that will limit human interactions in the coming years. With the invention of robots, everything seems to not only become effortless
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 it
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 requires just the commands from their respective owner.
This
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further
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 limits the communication as an individual does not have to talk to another individual because everything gets done with the help of
arificial
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artificial
 intelligence. One of the biggest examples which has given us a sneak peek into the future is Tesla's
self driving
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self-driving
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 cars. As these automobiles are operated by
a
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apply
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software and
does
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do
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 not require any human
drives
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drivers
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, which
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which
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this
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 clearly shows how human interactions will be very less in future.
To conclude
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,
internet
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the internet
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 has made
communications
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communication
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 possible and better by bringing loved ones
close
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, but it
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also has
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has also
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 limited the traditional method of communication as more people like to message rather than
talking
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talk
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 face-to-face.

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task response
Try to add more strong reasons and real examples for each point.
coherence
Use more linking words to show how ideas go together, and keep ideas in clear order.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling to fix errors and make sentences easier to read.
task
Position is clear and consistent throughout the essay
structure
Good basic order of ideas
content
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Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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