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The diagram below shows the recycling process of waste glass bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the recycling process of
wasted
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glass
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bottles
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, showing the continuous movement of each stage.
Overall
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,
this
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 recycling process involves several stages, consisting of three main stages, beginning with
collection
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the collection
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 of
wasted
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waste
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glass
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bottles
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 and ending with newly produced
bottles
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 being sold in supermarkets.
Initially
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, wasted
glass
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bottles
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 are collected at designated collection points. After that, they are transported by truck to a recycling facility. In the next stage, the
bottles
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 are washed using
high pressure
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 water in order to remove any unwanted materials.
Subsequently
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, the cleaned
bottles
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 are sorted into three categories based on colour, namely brown, green, and clear.
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this
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, the sorted
glass
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bottles
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 are sent to a
glass
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 factory, where they are crushed into small pieces. These
glass
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 pieces are
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 heated in a furnace at a temperature ranging from 600°C to 800°C until they are melted and turned into liquid
glass
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. At
this
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 stage, recycled liquid
glass
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 may be mixed with new liquid
glass
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. The molten
glass
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 is
then
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 shaped in
glass
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 moulds to form new
bottles
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.
Finally
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, the newly produced
bottles
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 are filled and bottled before being delivered to supermarkets, where the products are ready for sale, completing the recycling process.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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